(OLIVIA) 11+ Creative Writing Course-Workshop 5 - Feedback

Sep 28, 2026

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Feedback for Olivia’s 11+ Creative Writing Course Workshop 5 homework includes targeted guidance on story writing based on an image. Notes highlight strengths in opening style using dashes for extra information, strong adjective use, varied sentence lengths, and effective plot development and vocabulary. Detailed corrections cover spelling, punctuation placement around brackets, apostrophes, and proper dotting of i and j. The ending is praised as conclusive, suspense-building rhetorical questioning and alliteration are recognized, and the work is marked by Ellie and reviewed by James Davey.

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[teamkeen@theexamcoach.tv](teamkeen@theexamcoach.tv) | | --- | --- | Student Assignment: Write a story based on the image. Notes for student ● A brilliant opening Olivia! Well done for using dashes to add in extra information to your opening sentence! ● Your use of adjectives to describe is excellent. To improve, could you have described any thoughts and feelings here? © The Exam Coach 2022 ● Well done for including a variety of sentence [lengths and a lovely simile. here](lengths and a lovely simile. here) ● Be careful with your spelling of ʻenergetically ʼ ● Remember, you must dot the top of your ʻi ʼs and ʻj ʼs. Youʼve not done this for most of your ʻ i ʼs here. Without the dots, it ʼs hard to tell if youʼve written an ʻ l ʼ or an ʻ i ʼ I ʼve added in all the missing dots in purple throughout this piece. Notes for student ● A lovely plot and development of the story here Olivia. Your ambitious vocabulary is used excellently again here. Well done! However, I donʼt know what you mean by ʻexased ʼ as this is not a word? ● Excellent use of brackets Olivia. To improve, remember that your punctuation needs togo outside the brackets, unless youʼve written a full sentence inside the brackets. ● “Hearts were rapidly beating like a drum (but not the lionsʼ of course) !” -Here youʼ re talking about the hearts of multiple lions, so you need an apostrophe aȦer the s. © The Exam Coach 2022 Notes for student ● An excellent and conclusive ending Olivia. ● Great use of a rhetorical question. This build suspense nicely. ● Lovely alliteration of ʻflee in fright ʼ ● Ellipsis ends your piece nicely. Your work was marked by Ellie. Qualifications: 1st class English and History degree. University: University of Southampton. Lives in: Surrey. A bit about me: I studied creative writing and childrenʼs literature while at University, as well as the Tudors and Cleopatra. In my free time I swim, read and play Pokémon. I love to write and I hope to become a published author one day. This work was reviewed and approved by James Davey, The Exam Coach. © The Exam Coach 2022

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Write a story based on the provided image.

Sep 28, 2026

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