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There is some narrative control with an attempt to build suspense using a number of recognisable conventions at text, sentence and word level. There is an emerging sense of atmosphere and some conscious vocabulary (‘thundered’) and some appropriate, if over-familiar and contrived devices (‘a sigh of relief filled my body’ ;‘silence then filled the air’) . However, the characterisation is undeveloped and one-dimensional, whilst a contrived ending prevents this from meeting the standard required for Level 3.  \nStudent B commentary  \nThis response displays many of the features of Level 2 descriptive writing. It switches attention from one object to another: baskets, spaces, back streets, without stopping for a moment and lingering to describe precise details. There is an emerging sense of atmosphere but it appears formulaic: for example, the second paragraph goes through the ‘senses’ gears of taste, smell and touch a little too mechanically. When Student B stops to add little stories to colour the description, they rely too much on simple assertions such as ‘it was a painting’ or ‘the location was nice’.  \nStudent C commentary  \nThis Level 3 response lingers on details such as the description of the fish or the image of the lady in white weaving through the marketplace. It is a relatively short piece, but it covers a range of sensory details: the smell of the fish, the noise of the shoppers, or the feel of the soft breeze. Thereis an effective sequence of images, but each one is given a little more life by incorporating additional clauses (‘peered up blindly’; ‘from all over the country’; ‘as if she was moving through amaze’) . There is some precise vocabulary used, in particular the onomatopoeia employed to describe the cash register and the ‘clink’ of the knife. The sequence of images is shaped by the eye moving from one element to another before resting finally on the ‘lady in white’which provides a sense of control at the end of the piece, a narrative device almost that takes the reader away from the market!  \nStudent D commentary  \nThis high Level 4 response begins with the idea that the market is like the beating heart of a community, with the people as its lifeblood, and this is returned to in the conclusion. In between, the body and its sensory response is referred to throughout: ‘spindly’ limbs of children squatting in the market place; bodies engaged in a metaphorical dance of bartering; hands, fingers, crow-like faces and dead carcasses are described to convey an image of both life and death.  \nThe second key aspect of this piece is the spatial movement which is almost cinematic in its aspect. The first paragraph is akin to an establishing shot that stands back from the image-stimulus  \nto provide an overview of the scene: a bustling market replete with ‘hordes of people’, before‘cutting in’ to various elements within the larger frame: stalls, street-urchins on the prowl for free food eyed suspiciously by wary street-traders. Then, the student moves in even closer to eavesdrop on conversations between buyers and sellers haggling over produce, before concluding with a final paragraph that encapsulates the big idea and the reader can almost imagine the camera pulling back to reveal the scene again as the opening credits roll!  \nThe vocabulary in this response is rich and varied: the aforementioned lexical field of the body, the sensory excess of ‘aromas’; the ‘sizzle of the oil’ and even the tactility evoked by the ‘soft silk sheets’. There is clear evidence of crafting: the student’s corrections – for example the replacement of ‘crying’ for ‘crowing’ and the contrast between the ‘scorched earth’ and the ‘glowing rivers of","cbCairqQWAuB2wDU","https://ap.wps.com/l/cbCairqQWAuB2wDU","pdf",224273,"English","# Virtual communities\n## Commentaries on student responses\n## Student A commentary\n## Student B commentary\n## Student C commentary\n## Student D commentary\n## Student E commentary\n## Student F commentary","[{\"question\":\"How do the commentaries assess writing at Level 2 and Level 3?\",\"answer\":\"They focus on narrative or descriptive features such as structure, atmosphere, sensory detail, vocabulary precision, and how well ideas are developed beyond single sentences or paragraphs.\"},{\"question\":\"What strengths are noted in the higher-level responses?\",\"answer\":\"Stronger pieces are praised for rich, varied vocabulary, clear crafting choices, and effective control of sequencing and perspective, including cinematic spatial movement and purposeful ending.\"},{\"question\":\"What recurring weaknesses reduce the students’ marks?\",\"answer\":\"Common issues include formulaic description, undeveloped characterisation, overreliance on assertions or generic devices, and stylistic inconsistency leading to an unclear or contrived conclusion.\"}]","GCSE ENGLISH LANGUAGE - Virtual communities - Commentaries on student responses - Spring 2022 | PDF",1792468176,15]